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Today’s food travels thousands of miles before it reaches customers. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the
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present
food
 go through long
distance
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distances
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 before consumers get
chance
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 to buy it. Globalization makes it possible, and
i
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 believe that
this
 is
dangerous
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 trend because
long traveled
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food
 needs various chemicals to preserve it. I do write my ideas with proper explanations in my forthcoming paragraphs. To embark
on
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, we are living in
global
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a global
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 village, which gives us a chance to try
food
 that came after travelling
long
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a long
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 way. To be more specific, different kind of
foods
 comes from various regions of the world
that
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 is why every country has
popular
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 cuisine of other nations.
Travelers
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 visit foreign countries, where they come to know about many dishes, which increases the demand
of
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 that particular
food
 in their native country too.
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, in huge quantity
avacado
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 get imported
in
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india
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 from other parts of the world to fulfil
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the requirement
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requirement
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requirements
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 of people.
Hence
, Globalization is a major reason due to
foods
 are
traveling
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travelling
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 from so far to reach
it's
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their
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buyers'
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buyers
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. Stating
further
,
long traveled
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food
 requires
preservative
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preservatives
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, and other harmful substances to maintain
it's
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its
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 life. To elaborate
it
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,
food
 takes time to reach
to
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its customer, so
that is
 why companies spray a lot of toxic chemicals over it to retain
life
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 of
food
 alongside freshness. Which become unhealthy for consumers, and they ended up
with
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having a lot of health problems.
For instance
,
foods
 that are not produced in
local
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region
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regions
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 are
loads
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 with dangerous preservatives to conserve the life of specific
food
.
Therefore
,
foods
 which
are comes
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 after crossing
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numerous
numerious
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numerous
 miles
are
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generally have much more side effects on public health. To summarize, Globalization has
major
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 role in spreading
the
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food
 all over the world, but
this
 comes with a high price as these type of
foods
 contains
huge
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 quantity of chemicals inside them which compromised
mankind
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mankind's
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 health
that
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 is why it
is surely gives
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 negative output.
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