As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, it is encouraged that young
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should develop an
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mindset and build up their own enterprises. It is clear to me that the more money the business makes the more responsibilities to
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it should take.
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, there is no denying that businesses play a very important role in creating jobs for man.
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, Vinamilk is one of the largest food producers in Vietnam. They currently employ around 10 000 workers throughout Vietnam, according to their annual report. We can imagine
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what might happen if
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Thousands of workers would potentially
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their job.
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the social equality and security of employment will decrease.
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, large organizations are capable to use their manpower to provide social facilities
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a bigger scale.
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two years of Covid, Vingroup, accompanied by Chairman
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Vuong and his wife
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donated nearly 9000
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VND to help our government and Vietnamese
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to fight the coronavirus.
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unbelievably large distribution helped to save many
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’s lives including children. Without
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from these individuals, it is hard for our government to do
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previous period of time. In conclusion, the universe is operated in a circle. As a favourite quote says that “the more you give out, the more you get back”. The more a business contributes back to
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society
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, to help them to archive desirable goals, the more successful the business can get as it will be paid back by
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who were helped by them. The companionship between enterprise and
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helps to facilitate, to create a better world for
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to live in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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