“Some people say that in all levels of education too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?”

These
day's
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more and more
education
organisations have been taking long
study
processes. It has been proven that
this
long
education
process can affect their future carrier. While a common opinion is that
education
programmes should be less other's people feel that practical learning is not enough time.
However
, I totally
agree
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this
idea and I will provide some arguments to support my opinion. Generally speaking,there is a wide range of reasons why the masses believe that every step of
education
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been taking more time and it will create a
massive
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complicated situation in the future.From a practical point of view,the primary argument supporting
this
idea is that it will be beneficial for all educated people because if they take any practical
study
they will get an early
job
.
Although
they will finish their
study
early
besides
this
if they have taken any practical course they will get more benefits as they can easily high quality any
job
.
Moreover
, they will provide a
job
because I have practical experience.
However
,it must be said that there are several arguments against
this
idea that individuals should take practical studies
bedsides
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the main
study
. perhaps the strongest
this
is that folks get easily established if they will complete their
study
practical site. Whereas
if
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people can get anywhere their
job
if they complete their graduation
in addition
this
is that practical
education
gets less time
as well as now practical
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, as well as now practical job market value,
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job
market value is
more
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preferable. In conclusion, in today's globalised world getting an early
job
as well as being established early is really challenging and which is very complected if we do not have practical experience.
Although
If parsons wanna get an early carrier so they should be taking practical
study
rather than curriculum
study
.

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