In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry . Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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are being hungry.It has some reasons and some solutions that we analyzed
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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