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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or a negative development?

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There is no iota of doubt about the fact that we live in a globalized world. the great majority of people admit that it has a lot of benefits, while some are averse to it. In
this
 essay, we are going to outline what I considered to be potential benefits, that I feel are likely to occur, as well as negative outcomes. To Embark, there is plenty of evidence to prove that
globalization
 plays an important role in the economy. the mammoth conspicuous benefit is with help the of
globalization
 trading is very easy now. Indeed, if want to do international trade or foreign development with the help of
globalization
 it is very simple nowadays, anyone can do it.
Therefore
, now the globe is growing together. if a country,
for example
, finds a solution for a bad disease it will share it with every county who needed that.
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 if India grows rice in vast amounts they are selling their rice all over the planet.
On the other hand
, even though it has great benefits but it has some drawbacks as well. with
globalization
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 we sometimes face great problems as we did recently in the covid period.
for example
,
Globalization
 was the main reason for the spreading of the coronavirus all over the planet. even though it was developed in Chinese labs but whenever it spread it reached all over the globe. if we were not trading across the county at that time, we could have slowed down the spreading of the virus.
Besides
, we shut off everything locally and did not shut off trading with other countries in starting stage which was the main reason for spreading the covid. if someone took a decision to shut off international trading
then
 we might not need of closing the local markets. In conclusion,
although
 with the help of
globalization
 we soar our economy still it helps to spread bad things to each other, all governments should create strong policies so we do not have to face
such
 kinds of issues in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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