Q. Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, some schools do not approve
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to
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use
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their mobile
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. Some individuals believe that teenagers should
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their time with friends and concentrate to study while others disagree with
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idea
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and think that
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able to
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mobile
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for learning
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internet
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the internet
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. In
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essay, the reasons to support my disagreement will be discussed in detail.
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with, some people agree with
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this
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idea
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that
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should not be allowed to
school
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because some
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believe that the new generation does not concentrate to study because of
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addict
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.
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, spending time with friends is
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essential things because nowadays there are many
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teenagers
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using their
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phones
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during
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a conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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, some individuals
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media when gathering, she often
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use
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mobile
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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and ignorant
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. It leads to
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concern
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since they need child gain more experience from the physical environment at
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.
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, there are some people
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with
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idea
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because they believe that youth can
use
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mobile
phones
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at
school
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but teachers might limit
of
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usage
such
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as students
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to
use
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their
phone
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phones
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when lunchtime.
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but not least, they could
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it
faster searching
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faster-searching
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information on the internet than opening books.
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, they
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to record videos or take photos for collecting friends'
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. It is undeniable that
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reason is important when they look
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at that time, it is diamond memories. In conclusion, it can be seen that there are several reasons to support
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idea
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. It is good to agree with
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that they should not
use
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mobile
phones
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at
school
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but I
strongly
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convinced that the views of disagreement
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to the positive impacts as mentioned above.
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