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Some believe that tourism does more to create tension between countries rather than helping individuals better understand other cultures . To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is claimed by some that
tourism
 has an effect on creating more tension amidst
countries
 rather than contributing
better
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 understanding of other cultures
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individuals. As far as I am concerned, while
tourism
 creates tension, I believe that it brings comprehensive ways to know other cultures better. On the one hand,
tourism
 can cause some issues,
such
 as
envyness
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Inverness
 among neighbourhood
countries
.
For example
, when there are almost no enhanced fields in
current
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 country and it is unavailable for meeting any tourists while the tourist flow
are
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 increasing steeply in the other country, tensions are formed. Via
this
 flow, foreign currencies come,
economy
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 boosts and there
are
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 no chance between
countries
 to keep up with each other anymore.
Therefore
, tensions
rises
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 and sometimes lead to serious problems,
such
 as
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propaganda
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propagandas
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.
On the other hand
, I believe that via the developments in the
tourism
 sector, the rates
in
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 culture shock can be minimised. When tourists from various
countries
 flow into
current
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 country, it helps to form a melting pot.
Thus
, interactions among different societies and being familiar with their traditions build strong relationships and these bring
more
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a more
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 hospitable environment. In conclusion, while tensions happen in some circumstances, I strongly reckon that
tourism
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 sector is one of the best options to hone the skill of interaction and reduce
the
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culture shock.
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