It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, A person who takes a
risk
or has the ability to read or understand between the lines is successful. There was a time when people always advise others to avoid risky situations and try to make
decisions
on logical grounds but now that theory is changing rapidly. In
this
essay, I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of taking
risks
and share my findings.
One
of the main advantages of taking
risks
is you will reach your desired achievement or destination in a very short time.
For example
, if a person takes a
risk
in his business and that
risk
paid off
then
he will earn a lot more money and will be in a better situation in his professional
life
than others because the money he earns can be used to expand his business more rapidly.
Secondly
, sometimes people take risky
decisions
in their personal
life
when they are buying costly items like a house or a
car
.
For example
,
one
of my friends was buying a new
car
but he was not sure about which
one
he should buy so he consult
one
of his friends and take his purchasing
decision
on his friend's advice. It was a risky call because he was not sure about that
car
but
eventually
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once he bought that
car
he like it very much and after using it for around 6/7 months the market value of that particular
car
also
increased.
On the other hand
, if we talk about the disadvantages of
risk
then
people argue that
one
wrong
decision
can alter the course of your professional as well as personal
life
and might be you have to spend a few extra years to reach your previous level.
Similarly
, there is
also
a possibility that the gain you achieved through risky
decisions
will not remain forever. To make it
last
longer, you have to work on your basics very hard because sometimes if you are successful in a risky deal or
decision
then
you made that habit and take all your future
decision
on the same principle that in long run might be harmful to your personal as well as professional
life
. To sum
up
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the discussion, taking
risks
both in your professional or personal matters are essential for success but there are both positive as well as
a negative aspects
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it. In my opinion, everyone should take
risks
because the advantages of taking
risks
are always greater than
disadvantages
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and only if a few of your risky
decisions
are correct
then
in the future you will be considered yourself
lucky
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man.
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