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some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or to work in a foreign country. others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learna foreign language. discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone #learna
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 common way of communication. Some masses assert that knowledge of
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 is required to work in foreign countries while
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 others said that there are many reason
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 should learn other languages. I will give my opinion in the end. On the one hand, to work or study in a foreign
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 one must learn their native
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 to communicate better with them.
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 zone with them. In
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 way,
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 can make new friends in that
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 that
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 help them to reduce homesickness.
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, if someone
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 they can raise the productivity of that
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 can put their background knowledge of particular things into
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 and business. That
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 help the
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 to grow the economy and that finance can use to improve
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tourist
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 and education.
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, travelling and business
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 not only the reason
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 learn
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another language
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. Some
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 interest to get
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of
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 other
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 and
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.
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,
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drama
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 are widely famous in the world because of their unique stories. It has been seen most
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people
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the people
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 learn
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 to get
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 understanding
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 the drama.
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, there are so many reasons to learn
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 rather than travel and work but
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that they are not removing the mother tongue from their generation.
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