DOCTORS, NURSED AND TEACHERS MAKE A GREAT CONTRIBUTION TO SOCIETY AND SHOULD BE PAYED MORE THAN ENTERTAINMENT AND SPORTS CELEBRITIES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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deciding the pay of any profession.
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the fact that the work of a Doctor,
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and a Teacher is the greatest service to
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mankind,
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from various industries like
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have a transformational impact on people's lives. Both these industries,
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physical fitness amongst today's youth which is the future of our
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. Clearly, one should not underestimate the change brought by
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factor like the input cost or the expenses required to operate that business. Indeed,
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are paid really well, but one should not neglect their journey when they have worked hard their whole life and invested heavily in their preparation to reach that level where they can bring glory to their country.
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world can easily go in crores of rupees and
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on themselves to maintain that celebrity status. Since the cost is high, it will be reasonable to compensate these
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their pay being more than any other profession. While many want the pay of Doctors, Nurses and Teachers to be more than
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, I believe that all these professions are already being paid as per their contribution to mankind and their expenses to work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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