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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining Quality of water and air from both industry and construction. What measures could be takenTo prevent this?

#countries #quality #water #air #industry #construction #measures #takento
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The provided line chart depicts the
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 of unemployed people in theUnited
States
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 and
Japan
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's labour pool in the United
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 and
Japan
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 between March 1993 and 1999. It is evident from the given graph that the
unemployment
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 rate experienced two contradictory patterns throughout the given period. According to what is shown, the United
States
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 had seven per cent of their
workforce
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 jobless in March 1993.
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, the unemployed
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 experienced a sharp decline since March 1993 and reached the 5.5 % mark in 1995, when it remained roughly the same for one more year. After that, the percentage of the unemployed
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 dropped gradually to about 4% at the end of the period.
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, the unemployed
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ratio
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 in
Japan
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 climbed slightly from 2.2 % to 3.5 % in the
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 three years of the provided period.
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, it fluctuated around the exact figure for the
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 two years. By the end of 1999, the
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 proportion in
Japan
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 reached a peak of 4.5, which was more significant than the US
unemployment
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ratio
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. In summary, the United
States
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 showed remarkable efforts to reduce the
unemployment
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workforce
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ratio
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 while
Japan
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's jobless proportion had increased.
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  • environmental regulations
  • emissions
  • discharge
  • cleaner technologies
  • renewable energy sources
  • urban green spaces
  • green building practices
  • air quality
  • public awareness
  • education programs
  • environmental protection
  • waste management practices
  • recycling methods
  • environmental footprint
  • public transportation systems
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