Young people committing crimes should be treated the same as adults by authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
It is considered by some individuals that young
offenders
should get the same treatment as older criminals from the government. In my opinion, I disagree with this
because most adolescents indulge in criminal activities due to immaturity and if given a second
chance, they can make positive contributions to the
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society
with the larger number of years
they have ahead.
One reason why the government should be lenient with juvenile offenders
is due to the immaturity of young people. In other words
, many young people have raging emotions because of puberty and other biological changes in their body
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bodies
this
stage of their
. The reaction to these rapid changes could lead them to commit crimes because they have not mastered their emotions. Correct the word
theirs
For instance
, the sexual changes at puberty can make a young boy touch somebody of the opposite sex inappropriately thereby becoming a sexual
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sexual offenders
a sexual offender
offenders
.
Another reason why minors should get lesser judgement when they commit offences is that they can still be productive in their later years
. By this
I mean when people commit crimes at a young age, giving them a similar sentence to an adult will rob the
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society
of other positive things they could contribute to the
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society
in their later years
. For example
, a person who gets imprisoned at around age
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the age
eighteen
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of eighteen
years
will not contribute any tax or other valuable things to the
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society
.
In conclusion, I think young offenders
should not be subjected to the same punishment as older criminals because of their undeveloped minds and the loss of valuable contributions to the community.Submitted by beansola on
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