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learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. if these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out

#english #school #languages #risk
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Learning a foreign
language
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such
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 as
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 at school
often
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 seen as important more than studying local
languages
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. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In my opinion,
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English
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the English
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language
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 has become a global
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,
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study
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English
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language
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 is more important rather than learning local
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, but we have to give some priority
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local
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language
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also
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 in some manner. Giving an opportunity to learn
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 to our pupils at the school get advantages
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 teaching the local
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. As an example, with
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Education
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, students get knowledge about foreign
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 and cultures, and
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 it is helping to enhance and share their knowledge with international students. I believe that
this
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 is the best way to bring innovative ideas and technology to the
country
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. Students who live in the countryside, don’t get a chance to touch the new globalized world without
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 knowledge.
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, giving the opportunity to learn
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 to all children who live in every corner of the
country
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 is a responsibility of the government and the ministry of
education
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.
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, we can discuss a lot of advantages that we can have, because of
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. Winning the international economy is the best advantage of
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education
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, who has a good ability to use the
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language
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, an easy to find a job in the international market, and bring foreign exchange to the
country
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, and I thoroughly believe that we cannot take our culture things and
behaviors
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 to international without
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, there will be no more tourist industry in the
country
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 without
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 and communication skills in
English
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. Some people argue that learning a foreign
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 is a threat to the local
languages
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, and its effect on the
country
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’s culture and historical heritage, because when people go away from their native
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,
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 they ignore their cultural
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 and become demolish local society,
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 we have to teach the
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language
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 with under the guidance of experts, and with the help of government bodies.
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, others think that People do not hesitate to emigrate to other countries, because of
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education
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,
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, they settle in a foreign
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 with their family,
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, the local
country
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 does not benefit from the result of
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education
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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