Many think that governments should fund programs in search of life on other planets. However, others believe governments should focus on unresolved issues of the planet. Provide your opinion and discuss both views.

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it is undeniable that
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population on the
earth
is one of the most pressing in the world, which could lead to
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of concerns. It is true that because of
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, individuals are facing issues regarding living
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on the
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scientists believe that
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should invest
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to search for an alternative place for human residence other than the
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for
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better future. Others think that there are many other matters
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which are unresolved rather than living issues.
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should spend
money
on those to get solutions pf that unsolved matters.
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my perspective,
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should focus on solving other unsolved things which are bothering humankind rather than only focusing on searching
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other living planet
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another living planet
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. To embark on, there is no doubt that we are facing land issues for living because of
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overpopulation. In some countries like India and China, Where people are living in large numbers, face many difficulties which could lead to appalling repercussions in different ways like poverty.
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, if the administration
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money
to find
other alternative planet
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another alternative planet
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rather than
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, it could be beneficial. If they
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success
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to find
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in finding
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the other
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planet which is suitable
to live
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for human
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it can be advantageous for most of the masses as they will
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to get more
space
to
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their own houses. That could
also
solve many other
problems
as well like deforestation, increased conflicts and a risk of
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disasters like pandemics.
On the other hand
, there are many other
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need to be solved rather than only focusing on finding
space
for human living. To add on,
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relating the juvenile education, climate change, Hunger
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etc are quite dangerous for humans. These
problems
can be solved if
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give
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proper attention and actions.
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my point of view, solving these
problems
should be
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priority for the
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for the better life of individuals.
To conclude
, I accept that it is important to solve living
space
problems
because of overpopulation and for that
government
should give
money
to find
other living area
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another living area
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for humans. But I firmly believe that there are
also
many major
problems
are there in the world which need to be solved first.
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