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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#life #technology
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It is often argued that
people
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 were happy before
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technology
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 was not
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 fast as these days.
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 essay completely disagrees with
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 statement because due to
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improved
technology
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 students can find the best teacher from around the world and
people
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 are able to connect with their family easily who live in other countries.
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technology
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 has helped
humans
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lives
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more easy
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. We can approach with the best page with the best global teacher all over the world.
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, I studied and did the chemical preparation through the internet from the best chemistry teacher, who lives in Binh Duong while I live in Hai Phong. Plus,
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 is
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 field difficult to approach so
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 stimulates intellectual development. So we can say that if
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 want to complete
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themselves
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 they must know about
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due to
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technological improvement, we are able to connect any time with our family members
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everywhere .
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30 years ago, we didn’t do
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, we
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 didn’t know dear
people
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alive
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 or not.
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, when my father went to
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another country
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, I could see and talk with him
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 we are thousands of
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 apart. In conclusion, many
people
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 say that
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 help human can do something easier and
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people
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 never develop unless they have
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technology
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. I believe improved
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 has decreased the struggles of humans because pupils are able to find the best teachers for themselves from other countries and
people
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 can talk with their relatives easily through the internet.
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