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Some people believe that companies should hire young people. Others say that older experienced staff should be hired.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Companies nowadays are having different opinions about hiring people of different age groups and their experiences. Some prefer hiring the young
generation
 to work and some go for the experienced
generation
. In my ,opinion the Young
generation
 should be given priority over the experienced candidates as they are the future and have advanced learnings from the education centres, they are active enough to learn new concepts and can help the older
generation
 with new technologies to make work easier. The young
generation
 has the zeal to learn and practice more efficiently. They are good with computers, as nowadays the world is going mostly on digital platforms and everything is just a click away. The older experienced staff has the
experience
 of how to deal with different scenarios and situations which new joiners can't deal with.
Experience
 makes you more efficient than any book or institution. Higher positions are given to people who hold more
experience
 than freshers. They are not well versed with new technologies, they do not want to adapt to new working patterns and want to work according to the fixed routine they used to have before. To conclude I believe both the youth and the older
generation
 should be hired in an organisation as each level can be fitted with the desired
experience
 required. Each position is meant to be fulfiled to
according
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 the qualification and
experience
 required.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adaptability
  • Technological proficiency
  • Longevity
  • Turnover
  • Cost-effective
  • Fresh perspectives
  • Innovative approaches
  • Experience
  • Expertise
  • Refined skill sets
  • Mentoring
  • Quality and professionalism
  • Track record
  • Reliability
  • Informed decisions
  • Customer relations
  • Trust
  • Reputation
  • Seasoned professionals
  • Diverse team
  • Dynamic work environment
  • Balanced
  • Teamwork
  • Productivity
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