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In some countries, people waste a lot of food which is bought in shops and restaurants. What do you think are the reason? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In many countries all over the world, restaurants throw away a huge percentage of the
food
 which is considered to be
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leftovers
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left overs
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leftovers
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.
This
 essay will discuss a couple of reasons behind
this
 problem and suggest some ideas to solve
this
 issue. Plenty of
food
that is
 wasted belongs to kids that are eating out.
This
 happens because parents usually spoil
this kids
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this kid
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 with
huge
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a huge
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amount
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 of
food
 to let them choose freely what they want to eat.
However
,
obviously
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 a kid cannot eat all the
food
 and because of the way they eat, their leftovers cannot be eaten afterwards by their parents. 
Moreover
,
people
 who carry out feasts in restaurants order
food
 for more
people
 than those invited to avoid any
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embarrassment
embarrasment
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embarrassment
. There is
a
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actually a saying in our area
which
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 states that it is always better to have leftovers than to have
scarcity
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in
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food
. In my opinion, there is a lot that can be done to avoid
this
 waste of
food
.
First
 of all, parents should serve their kids
woth
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with
 small plates of
food
 and
they
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only refill their plates after they are done.
This
 way
food
 will be kept clean and can be taken home. Regarding the feasts, nowadays a lot of
people
 are requesting
comfirmations
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confirmations
confirmation
 with the number of attendees to know the exact number of
people
 that are coming.
This
 way
food
 can be served to the exact number of
people
. Another suggestion would be to avoid buffets and
instead
 serve each person a dish with all types of
food
 that are sufficient for a single person. In conclusion,
this
 waste of
food
 can be avoided easily and
instead
 with its worth poor
people
 could be aided.
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