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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 the opinion that home is a better place for children's growth while some believe that educational institutes would play a significant role in
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 both
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places have their own importance for the
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's
development
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. There are many benefits for the children being taught in homes.
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 a school of thought that mothers are the
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 learning school for every
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their
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 early age. Basic manners,
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 to talk and speak is taught
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 mothers.
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, parents know the skills and the weaknesses of their
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child
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children
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 to guide them and
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train them to cope
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 their weak zones. They find the best skills and the interest their
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child’s
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children
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recent research in California,
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children
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 who get enrolled in
schools
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 after 7 years are more focused
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then
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 the kid’s gets
admissions
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 in
there
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 early 4 years of age.
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, parents develop a good relationship with their
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child
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.
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,
schools
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 will
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 play a significant role in the
development
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 of the
child
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 because
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discipline and responsibility can only be taught when a
child
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 is out of their
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comfort zones
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comfort-zones
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.
Schools
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helps
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 to develop various skills like public speaking and
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 to build confidence make them socially active and trained them to handle every situation. According to
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recent reach carried
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 a great U.S physiologist, he concluded that
schools
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 are more responsible for the
development
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 and growth of children because of the environment and decorum of the school as compared to the schooling at
homes
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. In my opinion, both homes and
schools
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 are necessary for the children’s
development
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 based on the
child
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's age. Both
schools
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 and
home schooling
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homeschooling
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 have benefits
in
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 the
wellbeing
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well-being
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 of the
child
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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