Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Development is the most important point for all countries. Many governments set economic progress as their most important goal, while some
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believe that other types of progress are equally important.
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important aim. Overall, it is clear, that economic progress in a
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main point for not only governments
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but
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for ordinary
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. Most of us want to spend
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life in a
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developed
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where there are a lot of opportunities and comfortable facilities to live
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, if you are from
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well developed
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country
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, you can have
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great
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.
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, you are able to plan your life and can be sure that your
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earnings
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developed your
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,
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confident you are.
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, when governments think only about
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a big chance to forget about other aspects which can be even more important for
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, the well-known Maslow's pyramid of needs places your financial statement
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at the top. It is obvious, that there
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something
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more you need to think of in order to be satisfied,
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, social needs. So, a
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government
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government
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people
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the people
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which believe and select it. To conclude, in my view, social policy and social mindset in
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a country
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are more important than thoughts only about
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and money. Because money is just
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that can support you and helps you to achieve
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goals. And in
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country
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it works in the same way, in order to make their population happy,
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,
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governments
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governments
should know how to
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earn
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money, but
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they should know how to use that instrument and spend them for
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needs and social development.
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