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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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Some
people
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 claim that it should be compulsory for
professionals
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 to
work
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 in a
country
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 where they take their training but others say they have to go back to their
home
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country
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 so that they can help others. In my opinion,
people
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 should be free to
work
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 in any
country
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 they want and to justify
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 statement I will explain arguments with examples.
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 with, Nowadays professional
education
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 is available in almost all
countries
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 but the latest research, especially in the field of medical science and engineering is only available in developed
countries
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.
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, if
people
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 only
work
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 in the
country
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 from where they take their training and
education
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then
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 other
countries
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 will not have the same level of standards in different fields.
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, doctors are going to UK or USA for
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 but if they don't go back to their
home
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country
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then
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people
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 in their
home
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country
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 will suffer.
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, most students and
professionals
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 from
third
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-world
countries
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 are coming to developed
countries
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 for
education
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 so they have a very large pool of professional
people
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 and from
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 ,pool they can choose who can
work
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 in these developed
countries
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.
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, jobs will be limited in these
countries
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 and companies or institutions can not employ everyone who completes his or her
education
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. So it will be best for these
professionals
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 to go to another
country
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 and give their services rather than sit at
home
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 and waste their talent.
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, experts
also
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 argue that what will be the benefit for those
countries
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 who provide excellent educational opportunities to
professionals
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 and groom them to become a master in their specific field
.
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In addition
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 to that, once any individual becomes an expert in his or her field
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 once he goes back to his
home
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country
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 maybe there he will not get desired working environment and
that is
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also
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same
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the same
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 as wasting talents.
For example
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, If a nuclear engineer goes back to there
home
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country
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 and his
country
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 doesn't have any nuclear power plant where he can
work
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then
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 it is
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 a waste of talent. To sum up, some
people
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 give arguments in favour of like
professionals
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 should be required to
work
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 in a
country
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 where they are trained but others are feeling that should be free to
work
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 in any
country
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 they want. In my opinion, it will not be beneficial for humans as well as for our society to hold talent in any particular
country
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. If they can serve anywhere in the world where they can help other humans in solving their problems and help them to live a better life
then
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 they should be allowed to do so.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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