Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important think to success in life?
Some people
unsuccessful
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are unsuccessful
the
college, but they meet Correct article usage
apply
the
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apply
success
in life
In my opinion, our education system is the main reason fail the student in school,
because in school time pupils only get the subjects knowledge which they follow. So, they do not have Remove the comma
apply
knowledge
to filter the methods to Change the article
the knowledge
be succeed
, but Change the verb form
succeed
eventually
they get Add a comma
,eventually
success
because of
failures teach them lessons to achieve Change preposition
apply
the
goals.
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their
On the other hand
, we have a responsibility to add some value to the pupil’s life
teaching the procedures and techniques to enhance their knowledge to plan the future to be successful. For examples
, organizing competitions help to practice Fix the agreement mistake
example
to think
differently. Change the verb form
thinking
furthermore
, bring
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bringing
children
to see art exhibitions also
, help them to grow their creativity. thus
, arrange
international excursions with the patronage of parents or Wrong verb form
arranging
government
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the government
bringing
a lot of advantages to the pupils Wrong verb form
brings
such
as international technology, foreign cultural behaviours and opportunity
to collect the information Correct article usage
the opportunity
of
people who succeeded internationally. Change preposition
about
In addition
, some children
manage their failures and keep counting the success
but, sad to say, a lot of children
are collapsing with negative
Add an article
a negative
feeling
and most of Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
time
they are suffering from emotional stress Add an article
the time
such
as anxiety angst, etc. Secondly
, that stress led them to mental disease
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diseases
such
as atychipobia. So, we required
to cover them and support them to stand up again with Add a missing verb
are required
positive
thinking program
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a positive
On the other hand
, parents and elders try to avoid the children
from danger and protect them sharing
their Change preposition
by sharing
life
experience
from failures. Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
Therefore
, nowadays students lucky
enough to be Add a missing verb
are lucky
Add an article
a success
success
under the proper guidance and protection. Replace the word
successful
Moreover
, I thoroughly believe that significant
number of teachers still try to teach Change the article
a significant
the significant
life
lessons mean
while teaching the subjects. Add the particle
to mean
However
, certain
number of people believe that schooling doesn't help to Change the article
a certain
the certain
be succeed
in Change the verb form
succeed
life
. As I mentioned above, this
not
the case Add a missing verb
is not
of
colleges or teachers, it is problem of our antiquated education system and we cannot decline that fact. Somehow, we have to change Change preposition
for
this teaching methods
with the help of Change the determiner
this teaching method
these teaching methods
education
ministry and parliament, Correct article usage
the education
otherwise
near in future
our all students get started to fail and it may lead our society and economy in Add a comma
,future
downtrend
and demolish our cultureAdd an article
a downtrend
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