Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important think to success in life?

Some people
unsuccessful
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in
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college, but they meet
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success
in
life
In my opinion, our education system is the main reason fail the student in school
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because in school time pupils only get the subjects knowledge which they follow. So, they do not have
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to filter the methods to
be succeed
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, but
eventually
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they get
success
because
of
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failures teach them lessons to achieve
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goals.
On the other hand
, we have a responsibility to add some value to the pupil’s
life
teaching the procedures and techniques to enhance their knowledge to plan the future to be successful. For
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, organizing competitions help to practice
to think
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differently.
furthermore
,
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the
children
to see art exhibitions
also
, help them to grow their creativity.
thus
,
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international excursions with the patronage of parents or
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the government
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bringing
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a lot of advantages to the pupils
such
as international technology, foreign cultural behaviours and
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the opportunity
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to collect the information
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people who succeeded internationally.
In addition
, some
children
manage their failures and keep counting the
success
but, sad to say, a lot of
children
are collapsing with
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feeling
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feelings
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and most of
time
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they are suffering from emotional stress
such
as anxiety angst, etc.
Secondly
, that stress led them to mental
disease
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diseases
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such
as atychipobia. So, we
required
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to cover them and support them to stand up again with
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thinking program
On the other hand
, parents and elders try to avoid the
children
from danger and protect them
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their
life
experience
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experiences
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from failures.
Therefore
, nowadays students
lucky
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enough to be
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a success
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success
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under the proper guidance and protection.
Moreover
, I thoroughly believe that
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number of teachers still try to teach
life
lessons
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while teaching the subjects.
However
,
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number of people believe that schooling doesn't help to
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in
life
. As I mentioned above,
this
not
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the case
of
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colleges or teachers, it is problem of our antiquated education system and we cannot decline that fact. Somehow, we have to change
this teaching methods
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with the help of
education
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ministry and parliament,
otherwise
near in
future
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our all students get started to fail and it may lead our society and economy in
downtrend
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and demolish our culture
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