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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
line
 charts compare the number of use of electrical appliances in
households
 and the average
time
spending
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spent
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 in a week in a particular country over a period of 99 years. The first
line
 graph clearly
show
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shows
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that
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the
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 increases
the
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in the
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 percentage
use
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of use
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 of electrical appliances in
households
 over
the
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apply
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time
. In 1920, none of the
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 is being used and it rose
with
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apply
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significantly after
year
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a year
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of
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apply
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1920. In 1980, all of the people
had
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apply
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owned
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and maintain a steady until 2019. In 1920, the percentage of
households
 using
washing
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the washing
a washing
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 machine and vacuum cleaner were 30% and 40%,
respectivley
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respectively
. Both shows
rises
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rising
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 percentage over
time
 with
a small differences
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small differences
a small difference
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on
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in
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 washing machine dropped from 70% to 65% from
year
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the year
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 1960 to 1980. In
year
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the year
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 2000, washing
machine
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machines
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 have been 100% displaced
the
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apply
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households
,
while
 vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 only
have
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has
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do
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done
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 the 75% of
households
 in 2019. The
seond
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second
line
 graph shows a
line
 with gradually dropped
of
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in
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the
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apply
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time
spending
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spent
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 on housework from 1920 to 2019. For
infomation
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information
, doing
houseworl
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housework
 50 hours per week in 1920 and around 11 hours per week in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, households, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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