*In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. *To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

Today's world runs full swing with technologies which made everything available on tip of our
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. In
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purchasing printed
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newspapers
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news papers
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and books will more likely to
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diminish
deminish
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.
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supporting ideas on online reading and reinforce my ideas with
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. It is vital for every
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to walk towards
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advance
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world rather than clinking to
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school rule book.
Although
printed books and
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newspapers
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news papers
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makes
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reading much easier,
it
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cannot compete with
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of digital
news
which keeps updating every
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. For
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, every single will be provided on screen
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a short period of time occupying every population.
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online reading
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access to
news
within
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of
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time saving
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our time and patience waiting all day to strike up
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in
common
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paper.
Secondly
,
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a lot
alot
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a lot
of sum can be saved with online reading. Unlike buying
news paper
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, online reading does not require
amount
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to acquire knowledge.
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rate indirectly. Though reading from hard copy boosts our enthusiasm to research more, technologies had made things portable and comfortable
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we can carry our mini television where ever we visit. To sum up, making use of online reading not only reduce
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that we spent on buying newspaper but alongside we have
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advantage of access to faster
news
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