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Shops should not allowed to sell any food or drink that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#shops #food #drink #people #health
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It is considered by some individuals that the sale of
food
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items
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 that have been identified to
cause
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 harm to
people
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 should be prohibited. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 because the consumption of these dangerous materials will lead to sicknesses and could
cause
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 the loss of life. Shopping malls should be banned from selling
food
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items
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 that had been researched and labelled bad because eating the
items
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 can
cause
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 illnesses.
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, when consumers purchase contaminated
items
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 and ingest them, they can develop some sicknesses.
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,
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 will require hospitalisation and make them lose valuable time from work and
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 cost them the loss of money.
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, buying and eating
food
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items
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 that have gone past the date of expiration will
cause
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 damage
of
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to
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 some vital parts of the stomach which will
cause
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people
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 to be sick. Another reason why shops should be prevented from selling bad
food
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items
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 is that it can
cause
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death
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. The materials we eat directly affect our health.
Items
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 that have been identified as affecting the lives of
people
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 negatively will
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 lead to
death
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 which will make
people
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 sad as they have just lost a loved one.
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 person could be the breadwinner or sole carer of a family causing more pain to the family.
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death
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the death
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 of a mother from
food
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 poisoning can affect the mental health of children. In conclusion, I believe shops should be banned from selling
items
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 that have been checked and identified as hurtful to the health of
people
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 because it causes sickness and leads to
death
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.
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