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Parents today often tend to organise extra classes on weekends or even after school. Do you believe this is at all useful? Or, do you think the education provided in school is sufficient?

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 era, individuals have the
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tendency
tendancy
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tendency
 to compete with each other and they
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 want to gain more knowledge on a particular topic to stay ahead in
life
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. I strongly believe that
parents
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 are
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well wishers
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 of their
children
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 and they want their
children
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 to achieve
best
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the best
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 in their
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, because of
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 mindset of
parents
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, they always encourage their
children
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 to make an extra
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effort
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effort
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 young age. So, they want their pupils to do extra
classes
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 after school hours as well as during holidays.
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 my perspective, it is necessary to do extra
classes
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 to stay positive and to stay ahead in
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life
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.
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lot
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 of competition happening between
children
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.
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, every parent
want
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 their child to come
first
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. Rather than depend only on school education,
parents
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 want their juveniles to learn more and become an expert.
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, it is important not only for
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education but
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personality development and to improve their communication skills. Enrolling
children
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 in extra
classes
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 will
also
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 help them to review and practice whatever they have
learn
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 previously and it is
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 universal fact that
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practice will make a person perfect. To add on, in
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 world if
parents
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 keep their
children
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 to depend on only school education
than
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then
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 their
children
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 will face many difficulties in their
life
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 like lack of knowledge on a particular topic, low speaking quality and
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 less ability
of grasping
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 power of
mind
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the mind
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. To conclude, in my opinion, it is essential for the young generation to keep learning more from
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,
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otherwise
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 they will feel cut off from
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 as well as from
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the future
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generation
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. So, I strongly believe that
parents
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 of today should organise extra
classes
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on
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in
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 their
children
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's leisure time which could be beneficial for
child's
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the child's
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 development and many more aspects.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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