Parents today often tend to organise extra classes on weekends or even after school. Do you believe this is at all useful? Or, do you think the education provided in school is sufficient?

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era, individuals have the
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tendency
tendancy
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tendency
to compete with each other and they
also
want to gain more knowledge on a particular topic to stay ahead in
life
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parents
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well wishers
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of their
children
and they want their
children
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in their
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, because of
this
mindset of
parents
, they always encourage their
children
to make an extra
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effort
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young age. So, they want their pupils to do extra
classes
after school hours as well as during holidays.
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my perspective, it is necessary to do extra
classes
to stay positive and to stay ahead in
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life
.
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lot
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of competition happening between
children
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Moreover
, every parent
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their child to come
first
. Rather than depend only on school education,
parents
want their juveniles to learn more and become an expert.
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, it is important not only for
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education but
also
for
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personality development and to improve their communication skills. Enrolling
children
in extra
classes
will
also
help them to review and practice whatever they have
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previously and it is
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universal fact that
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practice will make a person perfect. To add on, in
this
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world if
parents
keep their
children
to depend on only school education
than
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their
children
will face many difficulties in their
life
like lack of knowledge on a particular topic, low speaking quality and
also
less ability
of grasping
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power of
mind
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. To conclude, in my opinion, it is essential for the young generation to keep learning more from
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otherwise
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they will feel cut off from
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as well as from
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. So, I strongly believe that
parents
of today should organise extra
classes
on
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their
children
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development and many more aspects.
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