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Would you prefer to live in a traditional house or in a modern apartment building? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

#house #apartment #support #choice
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 nowadays it is popular among people to occupy a sophisticated condominium
instead
 of choosing simple houses, there are
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 of reasons for individual choices. In my preferences, I still love to stay at
old
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 fashion house
in
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which I will give some details
in
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 the
next
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To begin
 with, I want to tackle my economic and financial stability. I have a good career and
earning
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 a medium rate income which is just enough for my daily needs and simple
lifestyles
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. For
this
 reason, it is in
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my favor
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favor
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with
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 me to live
in
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 a
low cost
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 budget rather than
staying
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to
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a modern villages
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modern villages
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.
In addition
, it is more practical
in
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 my part to avoid any problems financially.
Furthermore
, I am considering the comfort and
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convenience
convinience
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convenience
 that old fashion
house
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 can provide. I believe that it is one of the
influence
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 of our ancestors
to
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 their incoming generations.
Thus
, protecting the histories and buildings of our grand relatives.
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,I saw many places and villages that until now are very famous in their area. To summarize, a traditional
apartments
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 for me is
a
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econonomic
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economic
 friendly and provides easy life going. So, in my
opinion
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 I still preferred living in
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traditional
traditdional
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traditional
 houses.
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