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Covid Vaccination is it useful or not? give your opinion

#covid #vaccination
Since the outbreak of the
Virus
 in 2019 it has caused Millions of deaths
till
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date. And
also
 infected numerous
people
 all over the globe.
Virus
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The virus
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 is actually very hazardous because of
its
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 high spread rate, prolonged incubation period and asymptomatic infection. Since
the
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day one
authorities
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 are insisting on non-pharmaceutical measures
such
 as wearing
the
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masks, social distancing, sanitizing
the
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hands, not sneezing in the public etc all over the world.
Vaccination
 was not immediately available right after the outbreak it took some time
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to
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 be available in the market.
Vaccination
invention
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 have
overall
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 positive impact in many ways e.g loosen
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trade restrictions,
travel
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and travel
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 restrictions now the
muslims
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 can perform Hajj and Umer after getting
vaccination
also
 some
people
 had breathing issues they were not able to wear
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masks
vaccination
 made their life easier.
Vaccination
 overall controlled the spread of
virus
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 and
people
 were
finally
 out of their
house
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houses
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 and back to work which revive the overall economies of the world.
However
, the efficacy and the risk of adverse effects have yet to be explored in clinical trials.
Vaccination
 does not seem too much effective as I myself being fully vaccinated got the
virus
 twice. And many
people
 faced some side effects as well. And for the less developed
countries
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 it was quite difficult to vaccinate all the
people
because
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 money constraints.
Therefore
, the only way to confer immunity and control the pandemic, the development of
vaccination
 is a good step.
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