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Some people spend a lot of money attending cultural or sports events. Is it a good or a bad thing?

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There are folks, who generously
spends
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 on recreational
events
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.
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, excess of everything is bad even if it is on some personal or public
events
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. Though attending recreational and supports
events
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 is a good activity to stress out and to see your
favorite
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 game/ culture. If we look at the larger scale, cultural or sports
events
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 have many positive impacts on the economy and outlook of any country, e.g image building, boost in
economy
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, job creations, increase in foreign remittances and infrastructure development etc, As we see countries take pride in hosting the mega
events
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 like Olympics, Asian Games, Cricket/ Foot Ball World Cup or similar
events
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. As I witnessed in Qatar, there
have
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 been
lot
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a lot
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 of improvements after they got hosting
of
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FIFA World Cup 2022.
Now a days
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 life is tough everywhere and in
this
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 hustle
bustle
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and bustle
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 of life people usually can’t give enough time to their families but going to
such
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events
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 can strengthen bonding with their loved ones. But at the same time,
by
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spending so much on
such
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events
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 can drain your savings. Spending on
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such
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the such
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event
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events
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 is
luxury
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a luxury
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, if one has extra money
then
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such
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events
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 look good to go.
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 of doing something good for the society or poor, one is spending to show/ pretend,
high
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a high
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 place in
the
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society.
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, I saw one of the most luxurious weddings of two business
tycoon
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tycoons
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of
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in
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the
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Lahore. Master Tiles and Jalalsons wedding
which
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is considered
as
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the most expensive wedding
of
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in
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 the city, by
such
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 spending, you are creating
sense
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a sense
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 of inferiority among the people who are already finding it hard to make
their
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ends meet. In conclusion, spending extravagantly, so much on
such
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events
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 is not virtuous at all but spending moderately is good and beneficial.

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