Many famous sport players advertise sport products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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sport

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players

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sport

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products. I

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with

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statement because of some reasons. On the one hand, nowadays

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players

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much as famous as cinema actors. In

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each

person

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sport

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players

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sport

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players

for

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Lionel

Messy,

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advertise the announcement for Lays chips.

Also

, the most popular football player Cristiano Ronaldo

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shampoo advertisement, namely "Clear Man". In my point of

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there are normal things, which advertise

such

like items.

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bad quality or

illegal

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guess it is

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thing. Even though the most popular

person

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such

products, if these items do not have perfect quality or benefits for ordinary

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guess it is not good.

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, if

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person

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such

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their own product

for

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instance,

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prefer

this

nornmal

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normal

. Because,

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is trying to earn somehow, and bring advantages for common

people

. To conclude,

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think that when

people

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
45Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

231 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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