Many famous sport players advertise sport products. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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well known
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sport
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players
advertise any
sport
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products. I
am partly agree
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with
this
statement because of some reasons. On the one hand, nowadays
sport
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players
as
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much as famous as cinema actors. In
these competitive
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this competitive world
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world
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each
person
want
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to survive in the world,
also
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and also
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sport
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players
, too. The
well known
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sport
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players
,
for
example
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Lional
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Lionel
Messy,
who
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advertise the announcement for Lays chips.
Also
, the most popular football player Cristiano Ronaldo
announce
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the
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shampoo advertisement, namely "Clear Man". In my point of
view
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there are normal things, which advertise
such
like items.
However
, if the towards had
the
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bad quality or
illegal
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was illegal
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, at that time
i
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guess it is
incorrect
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an incorrect
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thing. Even though the most popular
person
announces
such
products, if these items do not have perfect quality or benefits for ordinary
people
,
i
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guess it is not good.
On the other hand
, if
famous
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person
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people
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,
such
as Kylie Jenner,
who
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advertise
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advertises
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their own product
for
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instance,
i
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prefer
this
is
nornmal
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normal
. Because,
person
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a person
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is trying to earn somehow, and bring advantages for common
people
. To conclude,
i
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think that when
people
exhibit
your
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own product for
common
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the common
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person
, they try to
helping
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people
somehow with their items. If popular
players
or actors advertise everything that got, it
not
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correct, because
this
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person
hope to just
ern
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earn
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money
monet
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money
and
do
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not pay attention
for
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quality
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these
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things.
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