new research has shown that overeating has become a bigger problem than hanger. What are the reasons of this problem? and how could be solved?

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over consumption
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of
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has become a controversial argument. Whilst there is a general tendency towards the spontaneous consumption of dietary products, I reckon that advertising
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have encouraged individuals to consume different kinds of dietary goods, and
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state involvement is the drastic remedy
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elaborated. To embark on, despite the various merits that are provided by publicity
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, they have negatively influenced the eating habits of the vast majority of
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citizens
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citizens
because of their seducing image.
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advertisements
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advertisements
use the snacks of children's favourite cartoon
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, adolescents will crave these snacks and take excessive bites. An eminent example of
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advert which
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an illusive image of its ingredients
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it is loaded with palm oils and refined sugars.
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, in a final analysis, publicities have
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effect
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on children's health.
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,
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the demerits of
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commersials
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commercials
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campaigns
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play a pivotal role in raising
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public
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about the hazardous impact of exaggerated
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intake.
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, if governments launch
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campaigns
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, youth will be able to stand against
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global trend and will reduce
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unnecessary purchasing.
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Finland and Tokyo where teenagers are significantly aware
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the possible threats of excessive
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intake.
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, no one can deny the quintessential effect that has been provided by authorities. In conclusion, after
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it may increase financial burdens. Eventually, I am a staunch believer that without teenagers'
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, nations could not have been more healthy.
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