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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

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The
death
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 penalty is considered
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Inhuman act by human rights groups. While some
law
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 professionals advocate that
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law
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the law
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 must act strictly in dealing with heinous
crimes
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.
Crime
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 is increasing in every country and to prevent it we need some tough measures.
Punishment
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 like being hanged to
death
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 is supported by many people .Whereas some people think that
life
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imprisonment
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 is an alternative solution to it. Let's discuss both views in detail.
Firstly
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 , to control
crime
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 and
criminals
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 there must be stringent
laws
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 and
punishment
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 is there. Once a
crime
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 is committed
then
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criminal
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the criminal
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 must be punished as per
laws
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 .
Crimes
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 and
criminals
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 must be dealt with severe
punishment
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.
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Moreover
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 some
countries
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 have very strict
laws
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 for heinous
crimes
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 like murders, kidnapping etc. For ,example few
countries
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 in the middle east have stricter
laws
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 for these
crimes
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 and being hanged to
death
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 is a common
punishment
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 for
crimes
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 .
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, some
countries
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'
laws
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 are lenient and advocate the
punishment
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 of
life
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 terms as the solution to curb
crime
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.
life
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 term
imprisonment
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 supporters argue that
life
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-term
imprisonment
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 is the solution for controlling
criminals
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.
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, if we look at
life
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-term
imprisonment
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 only a few
countries
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 are implementing
this
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 kind of
punishment
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for example
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 In the US , prisoners of heinous
crimes
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is
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are
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 put in jail for more than 100 years for their heinous
crime
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.
Punishment
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 is decided by a judge in the court on the basis of the severity of the
crime
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 . To conclude , it can be said that the
death
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 penalty or
life
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imprisonment
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 are both used by
countries
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 to implement
law
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 and
crime
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. To check
crimes
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 in
countries
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law
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 enforcement agencies are playing an important role in deciding the
life
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imprisonment
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 or the
death
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 penalty for
criminals
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.
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