All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity, How could it be tackled?

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Worldwide obesity has nearly tripled since 1975. People

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problem. The fundamental cause of overweight and obesity is an energy imbalance between calories consumed and calories expended and it should be controlled at the individual level and by the food industry. Overweight issues are created due

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intake of energy-dense foods that are high in fat and sugars and an increase in physical inactivity.

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due to the increasingly sedentary nature of many forms of work, changing modes of transportation, and increasing urbanisation. These changes in dietary and physical activity patterns are often

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of environmental and societal changes associated with

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of supportive policies in sectors

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as health, agriculture, transport, urban planning ,distribution and education. The

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, people could limit energy intake from total fats and sugars,

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of fruit and vegetables , as well as legumes, whole grains,

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, they could engage in regular physical activity.

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to the previous point, the food industry could play a significant role in promoting healthy diets by reducing the fat, sugar and salt

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of processed foods. They could

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marketing of foods high in sugar, salt and fats. By implementing above mentioned points, people can control

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issue in the long run which

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Obesity
Overweight
Epidemic
Sedentary
Processed food
Fast food
Nutritional education
Awareness
Stress
Emotional eating
Genetic factors
Access
Healthy food options
Marketing
Urbanization
Lifestyles

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