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Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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certain
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libraries
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like minded
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 people advocate that there is no need
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library
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.I shall
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hash out
shout
 both opinions of
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 conclusion with the advancement of my knowledge along with my personal viewpoint. To commence with
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 view,
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 is not essential for
students
 due to
internet
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students
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 topic on
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Therefore
, they feel they have no need to go
library
 for searching books or information about anything because they easily get data in
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 by searching on google and chrome.
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Besides
this
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time
also
. As they can utilise these , which they take for
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 to
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a library
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 , time for study. Apart from
this
, it is
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 way of reducing
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 of paper, as everyone
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 and electronic books they have no need
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 material if they go
library
 they use paper books.
Hence
, today's
student
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 give
first
 priority to electronic information rather than visiting in
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the library
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. In the
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justification
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 view,
libraries
 have their own importance in
students
 life, as they get reliable knowledge only by visiting in
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library
 because if they
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 sometimes it provides inaccurate knowledge.
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Thereby
,
libraries
 are
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 because it provides accurate material.
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Additionally
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Additionally
, it
also
 gives atmosphere to
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the student
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student
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 for study. To elaborate, if a reader read
book
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a book
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 by sitting in
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the library
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 they can easily
concenterate
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concentrate
 on reading whereas if they study at home they cannot get
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. In conclusion,
although
, some
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 consider that
libraries
 have no role due to
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availability
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availbility
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availability
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 yet, some
students
 are not trusted
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 aa
libraries
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