Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, many

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argue that it is necessary to give more knowledge to the young than to the old. but some believe that the government should

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teach the elderly to read and write. I totally disagree with

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idea because,

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of all, the future is in the hands of young

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, the elderly

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need knowledge. On the one hand, it is very important to support the

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by creating

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conditions for them to get a good education

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because when the government pays more attention to the

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, it is good for the country.

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, young

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are inventing many things now.

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, the memory of young

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is much better than that of old

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. It is clear that after the age of 27

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's memory begins to fade.

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, mature generations can do many things because they are more energetic and mentally strong than the elderly.

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, the elderly should not be forgotten because they may not have had the same conditions when they were young.

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, many elderly

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could not write in Latin, so some felt it was important to teach them.

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, if older

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are educated, it is beneficial for the

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, because when the elderly are educated,

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they can be an example to the

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, the elderly may have family concerns so they may not be able to spare time for studying. In conclusion, currently, it is not necessary to spend a lot of money on the education of the elderly. Because the future is in the hands of the

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it is better to invest more in the

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