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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion.

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Working from
home
 has now become a new kind of working model nowadays. Since the pandemic has hit globally. Many
corporates
 are adopting
Work
 from a
home
 model for their employees . Working from
home
 is now considered the new normal for office-goers worldwide. It has caught the attention of many companies worldwide to think about offering
work
 from
home
 .
Work
 from
home
 or remote jobs were unheard of before the pandemic hit globally . It was unheard of or impossible to imagine that some percentage of the workforce will
work
 from their homes and finish the project deadline . Because of ,
this
 more and more enterprises are initiating
work
-from-
homehome
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home home
 culture. ,
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Specifically in urban areas technology , teaching , and administrative jobs are now performed from the homes of employees worldwide. The biggest factor for promoting
work
 from
home
 is the operation cost of running and maintaining office buildings. Companies are now saving on power bills
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 and maintenance expenditures.
work
 from
home
 is going to transform how we will
work
 in
a
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 twenty-
first
 century .
However
, there are some downside points of working from
home
 . Certain business functions can not be performed by adopting
work
 from
home
 . Sales and marketing , corporate communication, corporate training of employees etc can not be completed from
home
. As these functions require human interaction and going out into the market is a necessity. Just imagine the sales team to promote a new product in the market has to talk to
a
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potential customers by interacting with them only ,
Furthermore
 employee productivity is
also
 a key point of discussion before considering employee requests to
work
 from
home
.
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 in the tech sector
work
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 from
home
 requires employee productivity and quality . To conclude
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this
 , working from
home
 is the new normal for
corporates
. Despite its ,shortcomings it has its own advantages . It Provides new opportunities for
corporates
 to explore ways of performing various business functions . For ,example now days hiring in the tech sector happen online through zoom or Microsoft meeting.So
work
 from
home
 is going to stay and will be adopted by more
corporates
 in the coming future.
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