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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
The
use
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 of fuels is increasing around the world every
year
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.
Therefore
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, Since 10 or 20
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year
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years
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 ago the prices are increment considerably. Some
people
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 believe
this
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 is the only way to reduce
the
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apply
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consumption and decrease the pressure on
the
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apply
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resources
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.
Body paragraph 1
In
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this
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 essay will discuss why is so important
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to
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so
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to
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 keep increasing the prices to reduce the negative impact
fuel
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 have in
different
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a different
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place
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places
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such
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 as
pollution
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 and climate change.
Body paragraph 2
Firstly
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,
fuel
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 is
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use
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used
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 as
energy
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 for cars
be
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to be
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 able to travel from one place to another and for
flight
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flights
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 to go from one country
for
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to
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 another.
This
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generate
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generates
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pollution
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in
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on
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 our planet which is related
with
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to
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the
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climate change.
In
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addition
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,addition
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 the way they extract the
resources
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 for
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energy
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the energy
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of
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from
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 the cars involved contamination of the
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area
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are
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area
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 where
the
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they
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 exploited the
resources
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 for
fuel
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.
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in
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apply
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Singapore have
high
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a high
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 level of
pollution
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 almost all
year
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,
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people
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and people
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 have to
use
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face
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a face
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 mask to prevent chest infections.
Body paragraph 3
Secondly
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,
people
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 think natural
resources
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 can disappear due
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over-exploitation
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over
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to
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exploitation
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the exploitation
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 of
fuel
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.
Moreover
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,
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a scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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 will need to
created
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create
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 different
energy
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resources
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such
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 as solar
energy
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 or electric
energy
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.
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, Tesla cars
doesn't
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need
fuel
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 for transport from one place to another only need some battery charge every 153 kilometres, which can work in
positive
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a positive
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 way for the
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environment
enviorment
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environment
 and the owner can be able to save money
in
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on
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 petrol.
Body paragraph 4
In conclusion,
fuel
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price
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prices
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 are increasing every
year
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 which
people
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 think will have a positive impact because will reduce
the
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apply
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over-exploitation
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over exploitation
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over-exploitation
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and
the
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apply
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use
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.
Conclusion
In my opinion, I
am completely
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completely agree
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agree
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onagree
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this
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that
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apply
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because I think the
use
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 of fuels can be damaging
for
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to
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 our planet for different
reason
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reasons
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such
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 as
pollution
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 and climate change.

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