Some people think international events such as the Olympic games are important and can bring nations together. Others however think that they are a waste of money as money could be spent on more issues. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is considered by some individuals that activities uniting

countries

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of the world

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as sporting

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are essential and should be held, while others believe these occasions are means of wasting resources. In my opinion, I think the

countries

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should continue to hold these

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because they promote economic growth and acculturation. On the one hand, the monies spent

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organising these international

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can be diverted to other essential aspects of the

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for

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example, the funds that will be used to organize an event can be used to build a hospital that will

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for decades.

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, the resources

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is

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this

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this event

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events

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a few number people can be used for national activities that will meet the needs of many citizens.

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, I believe these international

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are essential because it promotes acculturation and

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promotes peace.

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, visiting other

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during these

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allow people to understand the culture of other nations.

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will

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promote peaceful co-existence

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the

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of the world.

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, these

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boost the economy of the host

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.

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means money is brought

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the

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in form of tickets purchased to view the

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, hotel bookings and tourism in the

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, hotel rooms are usually very scarce during the Olympic games in the city where it is held. In conclusion, while some people believe international occasions are not essential, I think they are vital because it promotes peace across the world and it improves the economy

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of

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the host

country

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