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nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree?

#entertainment #performance #screen #laptop
Amusement is becoming an essential part of
people
's life.
People
 entertain them in various ways
such
 as by watching movies, serials, cartoons etc. Some say that they should prefer to watch these on their personal computer
instead
 of going outside. I completely agree with
this
 statement and I will discuss my points
further
 as well.
First
 of all, in
this
 way, we can save the time which we spend
for
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going outside to watch live performances.
For example
, if a person has a whole day off and he/she wants to get some refreshments
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 entertainment,
then
 it is better to arrange cinema views at home and watch a concert in less time together.
Hence
, they do not have to waste their time on travel and they can do the rest of the things later on.
Second
 of all, some
people
 do not like crowds and so at
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 they are able to pleasure themselves by viewing some movies or live performances.
As a result
, they can fulfil their enjoyment alone
instead
 of any type of disturbance.
On the other hand
, live shows can enhance our confidence in the community because they can overcome someone's shyness by communicating among them.
Additionally
, it
also
 provides financial support to the artists.
For instance
, if
people
 will give preference to live concerts,
then
 they have to buy tickets and in
this
 way, performers will get funding from them. In conclusion, there are many benefits to watching lives, and movies at home
instead
 of going outdoors, so in my opinion,
this
 is a better idea to get some enjoyment and save money as well.
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