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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will provide better care for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is a very challenging decision for working
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 to decide if their
children
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 have to be sent to
childcare
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centres
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 or to be taken
care
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 of by grandparents. There are many
parents
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 who are opting for
childcare
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centres
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 whereas many others argue that it is always better if the
children
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 are taken
care
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 of by family members or grandparents.
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 essay discusses both views and
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 like portrays my opinion on
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. People who opt for
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centres
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 argue that the brain development of
children
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 is fast in
childcare
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centres
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.
Childcare
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centres
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 give activities for brain development.
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, the early learning education system followed by many
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centres
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 helps
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 brain development.
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,
childcare
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centres
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 allow
children
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 to interact more with other
children
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 which is develop general acceptance and interacting skills.
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, people who opt for family members to take
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 of
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 argue about the security feeling. Working
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 will be more secure and comfortable giving
kids
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 to one of their family members and
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 helps
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 to work without any anxiety.
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, a parent can call
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a family
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member
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 anytime during the workhours and seek the well-being of the kid.
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, the latter view helps
kids
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 to realise the value of family relations and will help to increase family bonding. I support the latter view as I have been raised by my
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grandparents parents
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 and
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 helped me to understand the value of relationships. To Conclude,
Children
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 should be taken
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 of carefully with extra attention. for
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 , both views are considerable and
parents
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 should take a decision, considering all aspects and that decision should help
kids
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 and
parents
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 in all aspects.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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