In some countries, people are increasingly becoming vegetarians. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, there is a growing trend that people becoming vegetarians. I believe the benefits outweigh
demerits
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. Becoming vegetarian in modern life is so expensive. People that decide to not eat
meat
have to buy lots of vitamins that
meat
has.
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Human
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that supplement vitamins have to pay about thirty dollars for only one packaging that
last
one week.
For instance
, my cousin does not eat
meat
and
spend
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his own money to supplement
vitamnis
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vitamins
.
Secondly
, vegetarians spend lots of free time preparing
food
.
Like
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meat
eaters are cutting chicken, baking
in
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it in
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oven
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and eating chicken. They spend on it about one hour but vegetarians need
for
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prepering
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preparing
food
minimally two hours.
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, my aunt does not eat
meat
. She told me that she usually does
food
for
her
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two hours.
On the other hand
, becoming vegetarian can boost
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the country
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country
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economy.
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, it costs a lot
among
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of money to breed animals
then
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, kill them and win
meat
.
Moreover
,
factory
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a factory
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that makes vege
meat
can make two times more
food
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that
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than
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convenience
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meat
at the same time.
For another
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reason is
environment
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the environment
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. Everybody
know
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that cows drop
lot
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of carbon dioxide
to
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into
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. It
is widely know
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that our planet is
overload
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with all chemicals from producing
meat
. In conclusion, even though being vegetarian is too costly, I believe that not eating
meat
can boost
economy
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the economy
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and help
environment
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the environment
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.
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