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In recent years, online education is becoming more and more popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Nowadays, there exist varying opinions regarding the reputation of distance
education
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 rather than traditional classes.
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 online tuition has
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both advantages and
more
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downsides I lean a little bit toward
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this
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 rather than
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 teaching. One obvious upside of distance
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 is
incapability
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 of distinction.
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this
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education
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 system provides training regardless of any long way,
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 you get cous,
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further
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 or higher instruction from any country's university without leaving your state. Another benefit of online learning is being cheap. In
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view of the fact that here just includes tuition
fee
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,
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however
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 not
otherwise
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 payments
as
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 travel, airline and something like
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. Despite the above-discussed positives, I would contend disadvantages of internal teaching
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follows selfishness and self-absorption.
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, you are capable to turn off the camera and microphone at any time of
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 and
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, extreme self-confidence which is unnecessary and a little dangerous for students
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 elementary pupils.
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,
this
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education
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 path does not
embraces
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 socialization. Because, feeling
teacher
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 and her/his love,
creating
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 an emotional connection between
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educator
educators
education
educatior
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 and students, even the ability to communicate with peers
are
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 not provided by distance tuition. To conclude, analyzing all of these despite online
education
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has
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 some difficulties
such
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 as selfishness or lack of
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 capability for kids, at the same time it contains
much
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 benefits for adults.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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