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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.

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World warming is one of the hugest
danger
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 that
people
 collide nowadays and sea
level
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levels
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 are dropping faster and faster at a high speed.
This
 essay will observe urgent questions and relevant answers to
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 following issues. There are several causes of global warming, which have a negative effect on humans, plants and animals. These causes may be natural or might be the outcome of human activities. In order to curb the issues, it is very important to understand the negative impacts of global warming. With the advent of industrialization, the
temperature
 of the earth has been increasing rapidly. The harmful emissions from the factories add to the increasing
temperature
 of the earth.
For
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 In 2013, the Intergovernmental Panel for Climate Change reported that the increase in the global
temperature
 between 1880 and 2012 has been 0.9 degrees Celsius. The increase is 1.1 degrees Celsius when compared to the pre-industrial mean
temperature
.
Furthermore
, there is the risk of ocean surge due to the warming of the atmosphere and
this
 can cause flooding which will lead to the destruction of homes and means of livelihood.
For instance
, in Nigeria, it was reported that the number of houses lost to erosion in the year 2019 was 50 % higher than what was obtainable a decade ago. The aforementioned problems can be properly handled by some solutions. One imperative solution is to stop deforestation and start planting more trees and mangroves or any other vegetation to absorb water. Government should encourage its
people
 to plant trees
every
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 household.
Moreover
,
people
 should adopt safer practices that are not harmful to the environment
such
 as recycling. To exemplify, when going to grocery stores,
instead
 of using plastic bags,
people
 should carry their own eco-friendly bags to put all their groceries
.
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 In conclusion, the consequences of human activities can negatively affect our lives,
however
, we must reduce natural disasters as quickly as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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