The invention of the Smartphone marks a crucial turning point in innovation, becoming the most necessary item on everyone’s list. Today, it is rare to see a person without one, constantly entering data and searching for information. However, while it is a social milestone, the Smartphone is also responsible for a changing culture. Please share your perspectives on this topic and discuss your views on the subject from both a personal and professional perspective

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an innovation takes place,even though the most significant evolution has been considered Smartphone. That's why almost everybody has a phone in their hand nowadays.
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development has a lot of merits but some demerits as well, which basically depend on the point of view. From my
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they are used in a restricted manner
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can improve our community drastically and contribute to thriving. To commence, the phone can be used as a reliable and vital product in a lot of situations. What
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means is that they can save people's lives in difficult situations.
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, a friend a long time ago was alone in the forest because he wanted to take a hike.
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my friend didn't
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find his way back to his car
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he was stuck. He
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the emergency number and
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to explain his situation
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his smartphone enabled the
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guardian to find him.
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why I think that
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development is good for the public. 

 From another perspective, mobile phones brought addiction to people. Children and adults of all ages use them all the time
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do not communicate with each other.A good illustration will be
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my son acting like a zombie when he is on his device and giving no response when I talk to him.
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the negative side that phones bring to our culture. But when we learn
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we can avoid those art addictions in our children or community. 

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, the use of smartphones can influence our lives negatively or positively. But
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and we can learn to use it in a healthy way in order to avoid addiction in our children and community.

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language
Fix basic grammar and spell words clearly. Use short, simple sentences.
structure
Make your view clear at the start and keep it to the end.
cohesion
Use clear linking words to join ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
examples
Use one or two solid examples and explain them simply.
planning
Plan the essay first: decide your main point, then write.
content
You show some good ideas that phones can save life in danger.
tone
You speak with your own view and touch on both good and bad sides.
content
You give some real life examples to back up your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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