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People have a stronger liking for bad news, such as crimes and wars, than good news. Therefore, many people believe that more bad news should be broadcasted. What is your opinion?

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A widely held notion within our society is that bad
news
 should be broadcasted to warn the people of the different dangers in their life. Contrary to
this
, I think that a lot of bad
news
 will make our life
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. In
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 essay, I will
further
 demonstrate the reasons behind my viewpoint.
First
 and foremost, receiving excessively
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bad
news
 lets our thinking become dramatic.
This
 is due
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 fact that when we usually hear
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bad
news
, we tend to imagine that everything will occur in
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 negative way. A clear illustration
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this
 can be the case of the actors who acts in
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dramatic films, and they cannot overcome
the
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 emotions of the
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, so they
still
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 always in
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 sad mood for a
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longtime
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.
This
 trend is very dangerous for the citizen’s habits.
Instead
 of thinking about
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 better life, they become pessimistic.
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,
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people can imitate the bad
news
into
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 their lives.
This
 is because they receive a lot of ideas about crimes and wars.
This
 negative suggestion leads them
therefore
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terrible actions. A standard example can be the case of
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children who often see the
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contents
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in
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TV. They always mimic it in their playtime: they fight each other for fun, or they tend to fight other kids when they do not have an accord.
Furthermore
, some criminals have got
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ideas from the bad
news
 to realize their crimes. To sum up,
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a lots
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lots
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 of bad
news
 to the community represents a bad idea because It
discourage
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citizen and
influence
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 them to do
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bad things. For these reasons,
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media developers should
be balance
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 when spreading all
goods
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good
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 or bad
news
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