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Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that studying abroad is
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 great opportunity for students to improve their abilities and
to
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contribute to the
nation
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. From my perspective, I do not totally agree with
this
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 idea. On the one hand, It is
indispustable
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indisputable
 that sending people to
studying
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study
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 oversea
bring
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brings
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 many benefits to the
country
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. For the developed nations, it is the change for culture and experiences exchange. For the developing
country
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, It is not only the shortest way to learn a huge volume of cutting-edge
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 but
also
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 the opportunity to build
the
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apply
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connections with
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experts
of
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 multiple domains.
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, in the domain of health, as we know, the technique of stem cell transplant or organ transplant has been developed within
a
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apply
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two decades
in
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all over the world, but in Vietnam, we can now practice
this
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 technique
in
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 the equivalent level of other developed countries by standing on the shoulder of the giants.
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, the
nation
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 may face
to
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the risk of brain drain when sending excellent students
study
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to study
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 abroad. Indeed, many graduate students, especially the
underpriviliedge
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underprivileged
one
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ones
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, opt to emigrate to
the
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a
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 foreign
nation
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 to have
a better life conditions
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a better life condition
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.
This
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 fact is
the
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 significant problem
of
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in
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the
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apply
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developing
country
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 where the government do not propose a good policy to attract
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elite employees. In conclusion, studying oversea represents a good way to develop a
nation
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, especially
the
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 developing
country
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.
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, the government should have the ideas to improve not only the work condition but
also
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 the life condition of the elite expert to avoid the risk of brain drain.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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