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Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #country #benefit #students #study
It is believed that studying abroad is
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 great opportunity for students to improve their abilities and
to
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contribute to the
nation
. From my perspective, I do not totally agree with
this
 idea. On the one hand, It is
indispustable
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indisputable
 that sending people to
studying
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study
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 oversea
bring
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brings
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 many benefits to the
country
. For the developed nations, it is the change for culture and experiences exchange. For the developing
country
, It is not only the shortest way to learn a huge volume of cutting-edge
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 but
also
 the opportunity to build
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connections with
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experts
of
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 multiple domains.
For example
, in the domain of health, as we know, the technique of stem cell transplant or organ transplant has been developed within
a
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two decades
in
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all over the world, but in Vietnam, we can now practice
this
 technique
in
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 the equivalent level of other developed countries by standing on the shoulder of the giants.
On the other hand
, the
nation
 may face
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the risk of brain drain when sending excellent students
study
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to study
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 abroad. Indeed, many graduate students, especially the
underpriviliedge
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underprivileged
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, opt to emigrate to
the
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 foreign
nation
 to have
a better life conditions
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a better life condition
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.
This
 fact is
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 significant problem
of
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the
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developing
country
 where the government do not propose a good policy to attract
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elite employees. In conclusion, studying oversea represents a good way to develop a
nation
, especially
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 developing
country
.
However
, the government should have the ideas to improve not only the work condition but
also
 the life condition of the elite expert to avoid the risk of brain drain.
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