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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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in previous years, when students did
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graduation, they set
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 of studying in their homeland.these days,
people
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 to study
foreign
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country
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.the trend benefit
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drawbacks
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 and
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 list and give
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to begin
,there are many benefits of going to
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 county for the study purpose
such
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
in other words
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abroad their
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job
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gone
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canada
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 and he getting that dream
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life style
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 and all the luxuries as well along with that.
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to
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like outline more useful
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 to
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different county. they can explore the different
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new
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country
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people
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 about the different events and knowledge about their lives as well.
on the other hand
, there are too many advantages doesn't mean that there
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drawback
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country
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firstly
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people
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effective
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students are used live with their family that why it bit quite difficult for them.to illustrate, most
people
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 loneliness to migrate their own
country
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moveover
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, one more major reason of migrate into the
country
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student
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 get
annoye
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annoyed
 by the language barriers.it
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difficult
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 for them to
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 their mother tongue.
for instance
, one of my close
friend
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 went to
canada
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. she got
difficult
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to speak
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spanish
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 in some
part
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 of
canada
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 because
people
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part of
canada
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 to wrap up,
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people
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 from their homeland but some
people
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abroad for the high education of students. there are more advantages rather than
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disadvantage
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.
i
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 some of the major
reason
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such
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a better
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and exploring
the
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different
culture
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cultures
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 as well.
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