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Minority languages Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is a disappearance of several native
languages
 as people use common
languages
instead
 of the indigenous tongue. A handful of human beings agree that allocating a budget to preserve these tongues wastes time and money. I assume it is an excellent way to secure these
languages
. On the one hand, some object to the expense of funding to save these tongues from extinction. Some things need to be addressed
first
.
Firstly
, infrastructure or healthcare facilities have to be the lawmaker's top priority. Especially, the advanced transport system attracts other countries to invest and expand their business in the country.
As a result
, our economy will improve immensely.
Moreover
, the raising of ageing workforce brain drain is rising rapidly across the globe. So, the government should spend money in order to change the perspective of adults to focus more on the development of society rather than wasting time on other things.
Nevertheless
, I believed the government should spend public funds in order to save aboriginal
languages
. As
languages
 are more than means of communication, it is rather a conduit of human being heritage. So, it is most important amassed for millennia.
Otherwise
, if these tongues are disappeared from the world. There will be no cultural link that will ultimate disaster for the universe as without a link to their root there will be no traditional festivals and no moral and ethnic values that one should learn in their early stage of life. In conclusion, there are other things on which government should spend public expenditure but saving
this
 indigenous tongue in order to save mankind's existence.
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