In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweight disadvantages?

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adults are continuing to live with their
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are more than cons. in
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and finding jobs.
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their
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in their lives.
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almost family
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need any advice so go towards my
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of living in a
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family.when
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to live with their
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too many benefits
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drawbacks
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living with
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people's are living with their
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, some
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are living
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family and he's
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getting problems in
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because his
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freedom of living
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alone and put
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on them . to wrap up, in some
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, constant increase
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the
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living with their after
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their degree and finding
job
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but there are advantages of living with their
parents
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benefit
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such
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support of their
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while taking decisions and
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responsibilities as well as .
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