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many companies are developing electronic books.some people think these books will replace paper books in the future.to what extend do you agree?

#companies #books #people #paper #future
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e-books
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e
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books
 are becoming very popular among
the
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people
instead
 of
paper
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the paper
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book
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books
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,
specifically
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younger
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 generation have
this
 trend.while
i
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 accepted the fact that,
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e-books
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e
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e-books
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books
 have some demerits but
its
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 positive impact
overshadow
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 the drawbacks of its. On the one hand, there are some possible drawbacks of
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e-books
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e
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books
such
 as health and
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copyright
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copy right
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 issues.
Firstly
 ,when you use any electronic
devic
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device
devices
 for
long
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 time it can be harmful
for
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 your eye vision and
also
 causes
headache
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.
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Further more
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,
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e-books
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e
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books
 can easily be shared
in
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online
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the online
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platform
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platforms
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which could directly
effect
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 on author leading to
decrease
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 the sale.
On the other hand
, everything has
prons
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 and cons so do
e
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books
 have many benefits.
Firstly
, ebooks are so
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lightweight
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light weight
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lightweight
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so
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that , you can carry
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 of
books
 with you,while
in
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paper
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the paper
a paper
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book
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books
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 it is not possible to carry more than five
books
.
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 it is easy to find any kind of
books
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in
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online
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within
whithin
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within
 a minute. So, need no to go
stote
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state
store
 to
stote
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state
store
 for your desirable book.In comparison to
paper
books
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books
is
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 cheaper than that .
As a
result
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 you can save money and spend it on
others
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 important things.
Last
 but not least, if you use ebooks more
instead
 of
paper
books
 it could
be save
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the tree
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tree
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 cut and help the environment to stay healthy and fresh. To sum up, it seems that the advantages of ebooks are more significant than the possible drawbacks. The benefits found in virtual
books
 at present have
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 impact on young readers.
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