Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there are many suffering kids and adults around the globe. Some

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assert that

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problem should not be concerning to individuals and countries, because it is not their

people

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, many other argue that

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worldwide problem should be concerning to everyone, even if it is not your country's citizens. Personally, I am in

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of the latter view. To start with, as we all know the

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between Russia and Ukraine. The

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started almost one year ago.

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war

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happens in Ukraine, which means that many

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are suffering. In order to help them, countries around the world decided to pitch in. They started to offer shelter, food, medicine, and other necessities.

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survivors are still grateful for the opportunity to start their lives from scratch, and I think

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a great example. It is obvious that there are many

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around the world who can not get help from their communities or even their country.

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, there are many starving tribes in Africa that can not get help. So

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globally donate money to help them feel safe and happy.

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, communities and countries should make their

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a priority, because all around us there are many families and

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who do not have

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or even food. So before helping

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who

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we do not know, we should look after

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who are standing

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to us. Having considered both views, I think that all humankind must be concerned for each other, even if it is not a friend or person from you’re country, because we all are the same, and we all have to help each other to have a

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chance to be happy.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its drawbacks?

Nowadays, many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problem can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep.

“Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment, because it separates criminals from society.” To what extent do you support this view? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Each government and authority gave funding to art society; however, some people including me are strongly of the opinion that this is a type of wasting money and it is not profitable action that all social class can use it.