Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there are many suffering kids and adults around the globe. Some

people

assert that

this

problem should not be concerning to individuals and countries, because it is not their

people

In contrast

, many other argue that

this

worldwide problem should be concerning to everyone, even if it is not your country's citizens. Personally, I am in

favor

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of the latter view. To start with, as we all know the

war

between Russia and Ukraine. The

war

started almost one year ago.

This

war

happens in Ukraine, which means that many

people

are suffering. In order to help them, countries around the world decided to pitch in. They started to offer shelter, food, medicine, and other necessities.

War

survivors are still grateful for the opportunity to start their lives from scratch, and I think

that is

a great example. It is obvious that there are many

people

around the world who can not get help from their communities or even their country.

For example

, there are many starving tribes in Africa that can not get help. So

people

globally donate money to help them feel safe and happy.

On the other hand

, communities and countries should make their

people

a priority, because all around us there are many families and

people

who do not have

a warm homes

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a warm home

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or even food. So before helping

people

who

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whom

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we do not know, we should look after

people

who are standing

to us. Having considered both views, I think that all humankind must be concerned for each other, even if it is not a friend or person from you’re country, because we all are the same, and we all have to help each other to have a

second

chance to be happy.

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Individuals and countries cannot help everyone who needs help in the world, so they should only be concerned about their own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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